Hi Jean;
Thanks for the draft, honestly speaking it is such a big change from my original one that I am not sure i want to change any of the work you did, to me it looks great, so i will leave it as is.
I do see the benefit of using key words for any potential post of interest, and i will follow that advise.
At this time you can go ahead and conduct the corresponding proofread and let’s get to work on cover letters, and subsequently my linkedin profile.
I look forward to your comments and to the next step.
Thanks