Thanks for the revision, and I think we have a winner.
I’ve made some final edits (added ‘Officer’ to my military line, removed an errant comma). Feel free to wave me off the word changes if you had a specific purpose in mind.
I appreciate your help and am looking forward to giving the resume a trial run.
If you had any specific insights or advice regarding my resume, I’d appreciate the feedback.
Otherwise, thanks again for a job well done and I am off to hunt for that senior IT position.