On first pass, even I’d give this guy a job!
Hope you’re having a great weekend – we are enjoying unusually warm and sunny weather for Northern Europe in October :))
Thanks for the first draft – I’m delighted with the style you’ve adopted – and I can really see the benefits of using a professional already!
I’ve made a few changes and additions as requested,
and highlighted using the change tracker in Word – so should be easier for you to spot.
Look forward to seeing the next draft.
Many thanks so far, this looks great.